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Is home schooling good for children?
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February 26, 2012
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Children should never be educated at home by their parents. What is your opinion?

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In most countries children attend school and only in rare cases are educated by their parents in a “home schooling” situation. While I accept that this might work well for some families, I agree believe that a school can generally provide children with a better education.

In my view, the most important point is to ensure the overall quality of education for all students. Not only is it impractical for working parents to find sufficient time to teach their children, but they are not pedagogical and subject experts like teachers are. Additionally, in a school a given curriculum and regular tests ensure children learn all the required skills. Parents might be more biased when judging their own children’s skills.

Furthermore, a school can provide equal opportunities to all children in getting a solid education and a balanced view of the world. Some parents might be excellent at teaching, while others are less ambitious or able unfairly disadvantaging disadvantage some children. Similarly, children with special education needs, like being dyslexic, may need the help of an expert more easily available at a school. Finally, some parent’s have extreme or political views and leaving education to them would deprive children of the chance to explore different views. Children must be given the chance to form their own opinion.

Another important consideration is that attending a school is a social learning experience. When being home schooled, children miss out on having to find their place in a group of peers, an important learning experience for their future. Despite the fact that parents are important role models for their children, teachers can play a crucial role in helping children explore their talents and interests.

In conclusion, while I think parents play a major role in their children’s education, schools have overall proven themselves to provide the better and more balanced education. I think home schooling will be and should be limited to children that can not attend school.

February 26, 2012
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Hi Katiss

Another great essay - a pleasure to read! Are you an IELTS trainer or examiner?!

Yes, there are 320 words, and yes, the average sentence length is just over 20 words. If you read this forum, we usually advise people to keep sentences short (about 12 words per sentence on average) and to have a mix of short and long sentences.

But this advice is for people writing at a less advanced level than yours. In your case, the essay is beautifully organized, with three excellent topic sentences at the start of Paragraphs 2, 3 and 4, a clear introduction which defines home schooling, recognizes both sides of the argument and gives your opinion, and a conclusion which summarizes the advantages and restates your opinon.

Can you tell us how long it took you to write it?

There are a couple of tiny typos:

  • I agree believe that a school can generally provide children with a better education. -  Pick one!
  • Some parents might be excellent at teaching, while others are less ambitious or able unfairly disadvantaging disadvantage some children. - I would add a comma here, after the word "able" and delete the word "disadvantage."
  •  some parent’s have extreme or political views -  there should be no apostrophe - it's just a plural

I'd like to use this as an example essay here, if that is OK with you, with your name and all credit, of course!

February 27, 2012
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Hi,

thanks for the comments, feel free to use it. I really need to get an overall score of 8 for IELTS so i am interested in minor errors.

February 27, 2012
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Hi Katiss

Well you are doing all the right things for a Band 8!  

Have a look at the official Task 2 descriptors (public version), from http://www.ielts.org/pdf/UOBDs_WritingT2.pdf

 

Task Response

 

Coherence and Cohesion

 

Lexical Resource

 

Grammatical Range and Accuracy
  • sufficiently addresses all parts of the task
  • presents a well-developed response to the question with relevant, extended and supported ideas

 

  • sequences information and ideas logically
  • manages all aspects of cohesion well
  • uses paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately

 

  • uses a wide range of vocabulary fluently and flexibly to convey precise meanings
  • skilfully uses uncommon lexical items but there may be occasional inaccuracies in word choice and collocation ƒ
  • produces rare errors in spelling and/or word formation 

 

  • ƒuses a wide range of structures
  • ƒthe majority of sentences are error-free
  • ƒmakes only very occasional errors or inappropriacies

 

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