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Your word count is fine at 268, but your average sentence is a little too long at 19.1 words. Try to add some short sentences (4-8 words) to reduce this average, and watch out for very long sentences. For example this one is 29 words long:
However, newspapers are becoming outdated because of invention of new kinds of resources of information there are such people who still read daily papers and attracted by their headlines.
I think it’s a either a run-on sentence or the word ‘although’ is missing somewhere.
Today I won’t comment on grammar or usage issues, but I will look at organization.
What does ‘they’ refer to in the last sentence in the intro? Newspapers? The reference is not very clear, and the words ‘however, newspapers…’ in paragraph two also make us feel that newspapers is the topic.
Your thesis sentence in the intro could give your opinion (i.e. specify that you think the internet is the best source). You can read more about Thesis sentences here.
The first sentence in Paragraph Two is about newspapers. Does this mean the entire paragraph is about newspapers? No - we find that TV is discussed in the last few sentences. This should be a separate paragraph about TV. A topic sentence (the first sentence in a paragraph) should be the topic of the entire paragraph, not just one part.
Your third paragraph (about the Internet) looks shorter than Paragraph Two. Despite this, we find out in the conclusion that it is your favorite way of learning the news. You could have used a 35553 layout for this essay, with the longest paragraph about the internet. Read more about 35553 layouts here.
Your conclusion is only one sentence. For no apparent reason, you pick the internet as your choice. Why?
Have a look at the official descriptors for IELTS Task 2 Writing (public version) here, under Task Response and look for the phrase “inadequately developed” or “development is not always clear”
Your conclusion should summarize the information from the other paragraphs. You haven’t compared the various media to say why one is better than another. I recommend two or three sentences in your conclusion. This gives you enough time to summarize, give your opinion, and suggest something about the future.