I reformatted your essay again, sorry - if you use the small button in the toolbar with the "W" you can paste directly from Microsoft Word so you don't lose your paragraphs.
This essay is well organized and your ideas are clear and developed.
I am just going to look at a couple of grammar and vocabulary points
These two sentences are fragments - parts of a sentence. They are not complete - both are missing their subjects. Have a look at http://writefix.com/?page_id=2011.
Starts certain Economical trades with them. Become less obsessive about their traditions and culture due to the internet and new generation communication with other people.
These could change to:
Some of these governments have started to trade with others and open up their economies. They have also become less obsessive about their traditions and culture, and allowed their people to access the internet
I'm not sure about the word 'civility': I might use 'tradition' or 'heritage' or something else. Otherwise I like this essay and I think you've worked hard with it. I liked the examples you used.