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Are famous people treated fairly by the media?
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December 18, 2011
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 Famous people are well known and every one has a dream to meet with his loved idol a day. Whatever she or he is, a singer, an actor, a footballer, or any other celebrity.

 

Audiences have keen curiosity to know any and every thing about their favorite star's life that may leads some photographers and journalists to invade into the famous person's private life,

 trying to catch any news about her or him with no any consideration to their privacy, intimate life,  immediate family members or any other aspects. Celebrities are really unfairly treated in media.

  

First of all, celebrity is a human being. He has the right to live normally like any one else. No one can tolerate the continuous disturbance and nervous stress all the time.

They need to relax, to put down the over load of work and anxiety from their shoulders.

 

Unfortunately, media unfairly treat famous persons only to score more profit for themselves. It exposes the intimate life of the idol publically, and that may causes a huge stress a long the artist's life journey.

I think they live all the time under painful stressed conditions. Unless, otherwise, they may travel abroad with their family members or a close friend to enjoy a peaceful calm few days away from the photographers, paparazzi and disappear from cameras.

There, they may be able to walk in streets, They can do window shopping, they can enjoy some preferable entertainment, they may eat ice cream in the street which they can not enjoy in their home countries.

 

In conclusion, we can say that every one should pay a price in his life according to his situation.

Hence they are so famous, they should pay a huge price which is in this case their privacy and stable peaceful life.

December 22, 2011
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Hi alia,

and Hi Enda,

Would you mind if I add my comments about this essay?

-Firstly: Can you write it in paragraph more clearly, alia? I hard to find where your essay's introduction, body and conclusion begin and finish 🙂

-Secondly:

Audiences have keen curiosity to know any and every thing about their favorite star's life that may leads some photographers and journalists to invade into the famous person's private life,

I suppose your relative clause refers to the clause before, so It should be ", which" rather than "that…"

 

-Thirdly

celebrity is a human being.

I red somewhere that we should use "human being" only when we put it in correlation with other creatures, other things. I would like to replace it by "a person"

-Fourthly:

put down the over load of work and anxiety from their shoulders.

I've tried searching meanings of "put something down" but I havent found a suitable one yet (maybe it is my mistake). I have a suggestion for this: "lift sth off one's shoulders"

 -Fifthly

media unfairly treat famous persons

the word "person" is single form. its plural form is "people"

December 22, 2011
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linpearl89 said:

Hi alia,

and Hi Enda,

Would you mind if I add my comments about this essay?

-Firstly: Can you write it in paragraph more clearly, alia? I hard to find where your essay's introduction, body and conclusion begin and finish 🙂

-Secondly:

Audiences have keen curiosity to know any and every thing about their favorite star's life that may leads some photographers and journalists to invade into the famous person's private life,

I suppose your relative clause refers to the clause before, so It should be ", which" rather than "that…"

 

-Thirdly

celebrity is a human being.

I red somewhere that we should use "human being" only when we put it in correlation with other creatures, other things. I would like to replace it by "a person"

-Fourthly:

put down the over load of work and anxiety from their shoulders.

I've tried searching meanings of "put something down" but I havent found a suitable one yet (maybe it is my mistake). I have a suggestion for this: "lift sth off one's shoulders"

 -Fifthly

media unfairly treat famous persons

the word "person" is single form. its plural form is "people"

Thank you Linh, for your comment I find it logic

once again thanks

alia

December 23, 2011
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Hi Alia, Linh

Some good ideas in your essay  here!  

 

I like Linh's suggestion of "lifting the burden of fame off their shoulders", and the comments about 'people' and 'persons'  and 'human beings' are good also.

 

I think Alia's essay is clearly written and very sympathetic to famous people. I really see a big improvement in the essays!

But the conclusion seems to disagree with the main part of the essay. After all the great descriptions of the problems that famous people face from the media, you seem to  say it is something they have to accept.

 

There are two small usage issues I would look at:

"Unless"

I think they live all the time under painful stressed conditions. Unless, otherwise, they may travel abroad with their family members or a close friend to enjoy a peaceful calm few days away from the photographers, paparazzi and disappear from cameras.

The word "unless" here needs to be in sentence with two parts - a positive and a negative:

I think they live all the time under painful and stressful conditions, unless they can travel abroad with their family members or a close friend to enjoy a peaceful calm few days away from the photographers and paparazzi to disappear from cameras.

Of course, the new sentence is now very long. Perhaps something like this would be better:

Unless they can travel abroad or disappear from the public eye, they live in stressful conditions 

"Hence"

Hence they are so famous, they should pay a huge price which is in this case their privacy and stable peaceful life.

I would use 'because'

Because they are so famous, they should pay a huge price which is in this case their privacy and stable peaceful life.

 

Great work Alia

December 23, 2011
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Dear Enda,

Thank you for your continuous encouragement.

Me too, I feel my writing becomes mature more than before. It means that my efforts  start to give their fruits.

Yes dear, every one should accepts certain inevitable bitterness in his life, which he will never be able to get rid of. It's our fate.

Thanks a lot

alia

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   In recent years,many pieces of information and articles and the mass media were an invasion of celebrities' privacy.Therefore,the media is usually regarded as a frightening hindrance which celebrated people have to undergo.However,not all journalists and reporters are meddlesome because in many countries whose entertainment is not as developed as in the USA,the UK,etc:there are not many busybodies who spend most of their time meddling in others' private lives.

  Everybody knows that the mass media is always used as main means of informing readers about everything,including famous people's personal affairs.Moreover,the more shocking and surprising an article is,the more a newspaper or magazine is sold.As a result,paparazzi try their best to takes photographs of celebrities without being noticed while reporters even concoct untrue information so as to captivate readers.On the one hand,misunderstanding about the truth between celebrities and their fans often happens because the media only condemn them for making mistakes without advising them tactfully or encouraging them to overcome difficultis.Consequently,many celebrated people,especially in South Korea,committed suicide after becoming tired of articles criticizing them such as actress Choi Jin Sill's case.On the other hand,instead of mediating between famous people and their rivals or colleages,journalists usually aggravate their relationships by comparing them or mentioning their feuds in the past regularly.Therefore,very few film stars or singers are friendly towards their opponents.

  Nevertheless,lots of people working as artists in some countries such as Vietnam rarely undergo annoyance from others because in these countries,normal people do not like observing every single behaviour of celebrities or gossiping about their own stories.For example,in Vietnam:it is very easy for a musician to appear in public places to do what he or she wants because although people around him or her perceive who is near them,they never fuss over him or her by asking for autographs.In addition,why are not a lot of famous people in the USA infuriated by their fans or media?Through what actor Matt Damon answer in a recent interview,the reason for this is the way celebrities behave towards the media by hiding their affairs from the public or trying their best to boast about their achievements,love stories.In other words,the way media and the public treat them depends on what they treat the public's opinions.

   To sum up,before asking everybody,including the media,to treat fairly:famous people should wonder if they behave well towards the media or not.Besides this,culture of a country also influence what articles on newspapers or magazines are about.

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