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Nowadays intelligent youngsters are graduating in droves from universities in China, but in most cases, they go unemployed in the end. The situation is increasingly severe year by year, giving rise to many individual and social problems. In this essay I will firstly discuss the detrimental effects of youth unemployment and then propose some ways to overcome it.
The proliferation of youth unemployment is detrimental to various aspects of our society. Obviously, unemployment leads to personal financial problems. College graduates, with no job, have to turn to their parents for help. This is becoming more and more popular, and is putting a dead burden on the back of our already worn-out elderly people. Furthermore, A few unemployed youth may even go to such an extreme as to trade their body for food and living place, which sabotages our social morality and drives up the crime rate. Thirdly, the fact that youngsters can not benefit from what they have learned in colleges makes people think that college education is worthless. The proliferation of similar ideas induces significant declination of college enrollments, hampering talent cultivation and national technology development.
There are several ways to address this problem. The beat way to overcome youth unemployment, I think, is to encourage the youngsters to begin their own small businesses. The problem of youth unemployment used to be so severe in the 1980s of China that it threatened social safety and stability. The government then allowed the proliferation of "self-employing entreprises", which greatly relieved the problem of youth unemployment and promoted economy development. What's also important is for the colleges and universities to impart students more vocational skills. Academic studying and practical, employable skills should always go hand in hand.
Youth unemployment causes grievous problems to both individuals and our society . We, as a community, need to take effective steps, including helping youngsters to start their own businesses, and requiring universities to pay more attention to vocational skills, to finally resolve this problem.