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Should the government subsidize women who work?
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January 30, 2012
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More and more women go out to work. is it the government's responsiblity to subsidize them? To what extent do you agree or disagree to this idea?


Many women have full time job and their time spent outside of house is increasing. Raising a child is the most difficult task for the women as it requires lot of time and efforts, especially for the working mothers. Hence, some people claim that goverment should responsible for the child rearing. I agree with the opinion that child care should be supported by the government.

High quality nursery care will ensure the women to continue working in a current job. Because lack of adequate child care facilities, many women stop working once they have a baby and stay in the house. losing an experieced skilled worker is a huge loss for the companies and country's economic status, as another money and time will need to train another new employees. On the other, if there is reliable child care facilities available for the mother, they will stay on their job.

Morevoer, having raise a child into good memeber of the society is not a a responsible for the parents alone. Well grown up young adults will benefit the society, as they are the next generation who will lead the country. In order to grow up into good memebr of society, they need close supervision, love and care. When their mother is working, high class teachers and facilities are needed to replace their absence. This is usually comes with money and government should subside mother for this facilities.
Furthermore, many families need additional incomes from both parents. The average cost of living has continuosly increased these days. It is hard to live with only one income.That is one of reasons why young couples are reluctant to have babies. For example, in many countries, birth rate is decreasing due to high cost of child care. Country will become ageing society when there is small number of young people who can actively participate in the economic production sectors.

In conclusion, I believe that government should provide support for raising children, because of the benefits from the keeping the skilled workers, raising good member of society and preventing society become old.

February 25, 2012
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Hi Kim and welcome to Writefix. Sorry for the delay in replying - please feel free to comment on other essays you see here and help other writers!

This is a thoughtful, well-organized, well-argued essay. Some minor points I would look at are articles - 'the', 'a', 'an' - and other references, plurals and agreement

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  • Many women have full time joband their time spent outside of house is increasing.
  • Many women have full time jobs and their time spent outside of the house is increasing. 
  • Because lack of adequate child care facilities, many women stop working.
  • Because of the lack of adequate child care facilities, many women stop working.  
  • Morevoer, having raisea child intogood memeber of the society is not a aresponsible for the parents alone. 
  • Moreover, raising a child to be a good member of society is not a responsibility for the parents alone.  
  • That is one ofreasons why young couples are reluctant to have babies.
  • That is one of the reasons why young couples are reluctant to have babies.
  • If there is reliable child care facilities available for the mother, they will stay on their job.
  • If reliable child care facilities are available for mothers, they will stay in their jobs.
  • Country will becomeageing society when there is small number of young people who can actively participate in the economic production sectors.
  • The country will become an ageing society if only a small number of young people actively participate in economic production.

Apart from these small points, I really liked the essay. Great ideas. 

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