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Should public transport be free?
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July 24, 2012
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It is been a while since my last essay and so i decide to write an essay to vent my spleen..(from my work)...lol...

 

  In this day and age, public transport plays a vital role in the development of a country. Some people suggest that local authorities should provide passengers with fare-free transit. In my opinion, while people have varying arguments against this policy, there are some major reasons in favor of fare-free service.

  The primary argument against free public transport is costly. This is because the ministry of transport allocates massive funds for maintaining the transport system every year.  These expenses mainly include employing transport staff and fixing the vehicle damages. Without revenue generated from passengers, the skyrocketing operating costs will put a substantial drain on local government. Another problem relates to transit service. Free trips can encourage a large percentage of people to board a train or bus, but also attract some problem riders. This can be evidenced by that inebriated riders may harass other passengers and vandalize the property, thereby resulting in a negative impact on the quality of transport service.

  There are, however, more benefits fare-free policy brings than its disadvantages to the passengers and government.  The first of these is free of charge. People who usually use their personal vehicles will choose to travel to work or school via public transport because it does not cost them anything. More importantly, a slump in the number of cars on the road will improve air quality in urban areas as well . Thus, we can see a significant reduction of car exhaust emission as well as a fresher city.  Last point of these is alleviating traffic overload. If, for example, less people drive to their workplace instead, the road will be wider and safer to passengers and drivers. This not only resolves the problem of congestion but also largely decreases the number of accidents.

  My conclusion is that implementing a fare-free policy perhaps exacerbates the financial burden of the government and lowers the quality of transit service.  This policy, however, generates more advantages than disadvantages to people, environment and traffic.

July 25, 2012
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Hi ChrisLuke!

Thanks for this essay. You seem to be working hard!  The essay is fine, the organization is clear, and your ideas are supported.

Word Choice/Word Form/Usage

  • The primary argument against free public transport is costly. → The primary argument against free public transport is cost.
  • Another problem relates to transit service. → Another problem relates to the quality of the service offered.  OR   Another problem relates to enjoyment users’ experience
  • Last point of these is alleviating traffic overload.  → The last point is alleviating traffic overload.
  • If, for example, less people drive  → If, for example, fewer people drive
  • the road will be wider and safer → the road will be quieter and safer
  • lowers the quality of transit service. → lowers the quality of service 

You wrote:

There are, however, more benefits fare-free policy brings than its disadvantages to the passengers and government. 

You can often remove 'there is/are' and make your sentence stronger:

A fare-free policy can offer many advantages to both passengers and governments.

Shorten/Simplify

You wrote a 28-word sentence. It’s a bit long and vague at the end.

This can be evidenced by that inebriated riders may harass other passengers and vandalize the property, thereby resulting in a negative impact on the quality of transport service.

Here are some possible rewrites:

Drunk riders may harass other passengers and vandalize the property.  (10 words)  OR

Drunk or antisocial users may harass other passengers or vandalize the property and discourage people from using the service. (19 words)

Clarify

You are working hard to have short idea sentences, and that’s great, but some are a bit cryptic and need more information. For example, you wrote:  

The first of these is free of charge.

Here are some possible rewrites:

The biggest advantage is that commuters can save money.   OR The obvious advantage is that more people can travel more easily and affordably.

Conclusion

You’ve mentioned the negative sides  in your conclusion -  why not mention the advantages? You wrote:

This policy, however, generates more advantages than disadvantages to people, environment and traffic.

Here’s one possible rewrite:

This policy however can mean safer roads, less pollution and greater mobility for residents and visitors.

July 26, 2012
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Hey Enda, thank you so much.

As you stated that i did not mention the advantages in the conclusion , I just come to realize that i actually DID NOT copy and paste the full essay. lol. but anyway, those mistakes regarding words you pointed out make me feel like im just being stupid  ...lol...too careless ....thanks a lot and i will continue to write more essays and share with everyone..

July 29, 2012
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Public transport could be made free of charge. Are there more advantages or disadvantages to this change?

 

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