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Should schools require their students to wear a school uniform?
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June 16, 2012
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To give students feeling of comfort and freedom, some schools allow students to wear casual clothing. In addition, other schools believe that compel their students to wear a school uniform can help staff manage the student easier. As wearing school uniform does not merely unify students but also can make students feel equal; therefore, school should require their students to wear a school uniform.

 

            Wearing uniform is an assistance of the education system. For most of Asian schools, wearing uniform is compel because they believe that uniform represents one school as well as giving the student a sense of belonging. Moreover, uniform is useful identified system, which allows staffs to distinguish their children with hooligan. Further, uniform make the student feel more responsible of his or her action. For instance, students may not want to pick a fight nor do an illegal act because they are conscious that they will be caught easily by identifying the uniform.  

 

            More benefits are equality and comfort that come from wearing uniform. For a long time ago, people’s state is recognized by their appearance. Thus, whether nobody complains about what clothes, you are wearing, still people may feel uncomfortable when look at beautiful clothes of others and then think of themselves. Uniform is a savior for students who live in difficult condition by giving them more confident and more equal because everybody is wearing the same cloth. 

 

            As others disagree of wearing uniform is not necessary, schools in Asia still believe that wearing uniform is compulsory. For some countries, wearing uniform has become a traditional culture. To meet the demand of many students, the education system has produced so many fashionable uniform but still suitable for students. Thus, why not wearing uniform?

June 20, 2012
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Hi Alice Huynh,

This was a nice essay, but I still want to give some comments to make it perfect.

To give students feeling of comfort and freedom, some schools allow students to wear casual clothing. In addition, other schools believe that compel(compelling) their students to wear a school uniform can help staff manage the student easier. As wearing school uniform does not merely unify students but also can make students feel equal; therefore, school should require their students to wear a school uniform.

 

            Wearing uniform is an assistance of(for) the education system. For most of Asian schools, wearing uniform is compel(compulsory) because they believe(it is believed) that uniform represents one school as well as giving the student a sense of belonging. Moreover, uniform is useful identified system, which allows staffs to distinguish their children with hooligan(this word seems too specific and not suitable). Further, uniform make(makes) the students feel more responsible of his or her action. For instance, students may not want to pick a fight nor do an illegal act because they are conscious that they will be caught easily by identifying the uniform.  

 

            More benefits are equality and comfort that come from wearing uniform. For a long time ago, people’s state is recognized by their appearance. Thus, whether nobody complains about what clothes(,) you are wearing, still people may feel uncomfortable when look at beautiful clothes of others and then think of themselves. Uniform is a savior for students who live in difficult condition by giving them more confident and more equal because everybody is wearing the same cloth. 

 

            As others disagree of wearing uniform is not necessary, schools in Asia still believe that wearing uniform is compulsory. For some countries, wearing uniform has become a traditional culture. To meet the demand of many students, the education system has produced so many fashionable uniform but still suitable for students. Thus, why not wearing uniform?

June 20, 2012
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Great essay Alice Huynh:

just share some comments with u:

1. to give students feeling of comfort and freedom, some schools allow students to wear casual clothing. In addition, other schools believe that compel their students to wear a school uniform can help staff manage the student easier

(i reckon "in addition"a here is not appropriate . "contrast" transitive words should be better as in you make a comparison in this context.   anything like ""however,conversely, or while here ").

Compelling spelling is correct as Ngo Duy Quang pointed out .

 

2.  Wearing uniform is an assistance of(for) the education system.

(i feel you still can make this sentence more specific or i dont know ,hmm i just feel a bit strange to read it.)

 

3.For most of Asian schools, wearing uniform is compel(compulsory) because they believe(it is believed) that uniform represents one school as well as giving the student a sense of belonging

(i dont think it should be "it is believed that"....i reckon rewrite it like .....because it is believed to represent....blah blah...it here means wearing uniform ....)

 

4.uniform is useful identified system, which allows staffs to distinguish their children with hooligan(this word seems too specific and not suitable).

(useful identified system?  uniform helps the teacher identify the students)

(hooligan?????aint it too exaggerated?   if i am not wearing a school uniform and walking on the street. then i become a hooligan ?)

 

5.uniform make(makes) the students feel more responsible of his or her action. For instance, students may not want to pick a fight nor do an illegal act because they are conscious that they will be caught easily by identifying the uniform.

(their...you wrote the students.....)

(you said the students feel more responsible for their action. but the example shows "because they are conscious that they will be caught easily by identifying the uniform."   hmm...im just confused....   )

 

6.    More benefits are equality and comfort that come from wearing uniform

(Rewrite this sentence.)

 

7.For a long time ago, people’s state is recognized by their appearance.  (huh? state recognized by appearance?)

 

8.Thus, whether nobody complains about what clothes(,) you are wearing, still people may feel uncomfortable when look (looking)at beautiful clothes of others and then think of themselves.

(sorry, i dont get it....whether nobody complains....)

 

9. Uniform is a savior for students who live in difficult condition by giving them more confident and more equal because everybody is wearing the same cloth.

(Savior? hmmm..even for people living in a poverty-stricken life,  why not give them clothes ?  it must be uniform?  i reckon it is not very convincing ..hehe) btw,  cloth means fabric or woven from the wool or cotton....wearing the same cloth.....hmmm...well...)

 

10v   As others disagree of wearing uniform is not necessary,

(rewrite this one.)

 

overall,  i suggest that use the appropriate words, simplify your sentences and check your grammar and spellings every time.  do not let your read guess what you are talking about , well although i label myself as this category of ppl.....this is not good.....lol...keep writing...

June 20, 2012
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Hi, Ngo Duy Quang and chrisluke921221, I really appreciate your work put on my essay, and I also have some comment for you, too.

 

1. to give students feeling of comfort and freedom, some schools allow students to wear casual clothing. In addition, other schools believe that compel their students to wear a school uniform can help staff manage the student easier

(i reckon "in addition"a here is not appropriate . "contrast" transitive words should be better as in you make a comparison in this context.   anything like ""however,conversely, or while here "). -> I don't understand, can you explain for me? I think two sentences are talking about the benefit of wearing uniform. The second sentence doesn't talk about the opposite affect, why should I put "however,contrast" there?

Compelling spelling is correct as Ngo Duy Quang pointed out .

 -> I agree with you by this.

2.  Wearing uniform is an assistance of(for) the education system.

(i feel you still can make this sentence more specific or i dont know ,hmm i just feel a bit strange to read it.)

 -> I mean, this a thesis statement for the second paragraph, and the next sentence will make this statement more clearer. 

3.For most of Asian schools, wearing uniform is compel(compulsory) because they believe(it is believed) that uniform represents one school as well as giving the student a sense of belonging

(i dont think it should be "it is believed that"….i reckon rewrite it like …..because it is believed to represent….blah blah…it here means wearing uniform ….)

 -> I also agree with you by this.

4.uniform is useful identified system, which allows staffs to distinguish their children with hooligan(this word seems too specific and not suitable).

(useful identified system?  uniform helps the teacher identify the students)

(hooligan?????aint it too exaggerated?   if i am not wearing a school uniform and walking on the street. then i become a hooligan ?) -> I mean, some bad guys try to go into school break-in a school and some of them are too young, or look like a student. Therefore, wearing uniform will help the staff manage students easier. Well, I think I need more explain in this sentence.

5.uniform make(makes) the students feel more responsible of his or her action. For instance, students may not want to pick a fight nor do an illegal act because they are conscious that they will be caught easily by identifying the uniform.

(their…you wrote the students…..)

(you said the students feel more responsible for their action. but the example shows "because they are conscious that they will be caught easily by identifying the uniform."   hmm…im just confused….   ) -> Well, it is true to caught a criminal easier, because he has his name and class label on it as the Asian school uses to doing.

 

6.    More benefits are equality and comfort that come from wearing uniform

(Rewrite this sentence.)

 -> Benefits of wearing uniform is comfort and equality (do you think it ok? Or you think it need more specific?)

7.For a long time ago, people’s state is recognized by their appearance.  (huh? state recognized by appearance?)

-> I think I should rewrite the sentence like this:

In the old society, the aristocrat used to recognize each other by luxury cloths and appearance.

 

8.Thus, whether nobody complains about what clothes(,) you are wearing, still people may feel uncomfortable when look (looking)at beautiful clothes of others and then think of themselves.

(sorry, i dont get it….whether nobody complains….)

 -> I will fix the sentence like this:

Nowadays, in the small society in school, people still judge the others through their appearance.

9. Uniform is a savior for students who live in difficult condition by giving them more confident and more equal because everybody is wearing the same cloth.

(Savior? hmmm..even for people living in a poverty-stricken life,  why not give them clothes ?  it must be uniform?  i reckon it is not very convincing ..hehe) btw,  cloth means fabric or woven from the wool or cotton….wearing the same cloth…..hmmm…well…)

 -> I mean, because some students may be teased for their appearance, they may not feel confident anymore. It is true, and it have already happened in my country.

10v   As others disagree of wearing uniform is not necessary,

(rewrite this one.)

-> As others do not consent to wear uniform,

Well because you don't understand my idea, I will rewrite it again. Thank you very much, Ngo Duy Quang and chrisluke921221

June 20, 2012
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Here is my rewrite essay,

            To give students feeling of comfort and freedom, some schools allow students to wear casual clothing. Moreover, other schools believe that compelling their students to wear a school uniform can help staff manage the student easier. As wearing school uniform does not merely unify students but also can make students feel equal. Therefore, school should require their students to wear a school uniform.

            Wearing uniform is an assistance for the education system because it is not only the representative of a school but also help the staff supervises the students. For most of Asian schools, wearing uniform is compulsory, because it is believed represents one school as well as giving the student a sense of belonging. Moreover, uniform is identified system, which allows staffs to distinguish their children with hooligan. For example, because many bad guys may look too young, the staff could mistakenly recognize these guys as the student. Therefore, wearing uniform will help staffs and teachers manage their students more efficient. Further, students can be recognized by the information (such as name, school’s name and class), which labelled on uniform. In addition, students can also be identified by distinct style of different schools. Thus, uniform makes the student feel more responsible for his or her action in public.

            The uniform also brings comfort and confidence to its owner. In the old society, the aristocrat used to recognize each other by luxury cloths and appearance. Nowadays, in the small society of academy, people still judge the others through their appearance. As a result, some students may be teased for their appearances; they may not feel confident anymore. In order that, the uniform makes student feel more confident and more equal, because everybody is wearing the same cloth. 

            As others do not consent to wear uniform, schools in Asia still believe that wearing uniform is necessary and compulsory. For some countries, wearing uniform has become a traditional culture. To meet the demand of many students, the education system has produced so many fashionable uniform but still suitable for students. For that reason, why not wearing uniform?

June 21, 2012
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Hi Alice,

 

Well done. Nice ideas and good vocaburlary 🙂

As we do not know what the full topic question is (agree or disagree/ To what extent.../ why and whats the benefits), so I assume you wrote this essay to answer "agree or disagree" because your give two opinions in your 1st paragraph.Here is something I think you can improved in your essay.

1. I think its better to give some clear topic sentences in your First and Last paragraph.

2. Your have many ideas to support your essay, but I suggest you do not list them all. For example, in the 2nd paragraph, its better to use some words to explain your ideas rather than left an idea without any support. 

3. The opposite opinion has only mentioned once in your essay. Shall we give a paragraph to argue it if this is an agree/disagree question? (I'm not sure about this, but I did in mine)

4. A little modifications in your essay as below 🙂

 

To give students the feeling of comfort and freedom, some schools allow students to wear casual clothing. Moreover However, other schools believe that compelling their students to wear a school uniform can help staffs manage the student easier. As wearing school uniform does not merely unify students but also can make students feel equal. Therefore, school should require their students to wear a school uniform.

            Wearing uniform is an assistance for the education system because it is not only the representative of a school but also help the staff supervises the students. For In most of Asian schools, wearing uniform is compulsory, because it is believed the uniforms represents one school as well as giving give the student a sense of belonging. Moreover, uniform is identified system an identify, which allows staffs to distinguish their children with hooligan others. For example, because many bad guys some some adults may look too young, the staff could mistakenly recognize these guys them as the students. Therefore, wearing uniform will  can help staffs and teachers manage their students more efficient. Further, students can be recognized by the information, (such as name, school’s name and class), which are labelled on uniform. In addition, students can also be identified by distinct style of different schools. Thus, uniform makes the students feel more responsible for his or her  their actions in public.

            The uniform also brings comfort and confidence to its owner. In the old society, the aristocrat used to recognize each other by luxury cloths and appearance. Nowadays, in the small society of academy, people still judge the others through their appearance. As a result, sSome students may be teased for because of their appearances; and they may not feel confident anymore. In order terms of  that, the uniform makes student feel more confident and more equal, because everybody is wearing the same cloth. 

            As others do not consent to wear uniform, schools in Asia still believe that wearing uniform is necessary and it should be compulsory. For  In some countries, wearing uniform has become a traditional culture. To meet the demand of many students, the education system has produced so many fashionable uniform but still suitable for students. For that reason, why not wearing uniform?

June 21, 2012
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Here is my writing on this topic. I wrote it to answer the agree/disagree question, please do not hesitated to give me your suggestions 🙂

 

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Should schools require their students to wear a school uniform? Agree or Disagree?

 

Most schools have their unique school uniform and their students need to wear it while they come to study. However, some people think students have the right to choose what to wear. In this essay, I will explain why I support schools for keep the dress code.

 

Although it is true that wearing a casual cloth is comfortable and relaxed, wearing a school is able to offer these feelings too. As the development of clothing industry, school uniforms are no longer a representative of bored and inconvenient. In fact, since most uniforms are being designed compromising both fashion and comfort, the difference between being casually and being uniformed is very slight now.

 

Another reason I support school dress code is, I believe uniforms are necessarily needed in terms of helping students to learn responsibilities. The uniforms remind students who they are and teach them honor. The uniform is like a guidance along with the students when their parents and teachers are not around. Some student behave themselves better while they are wearing the school uniform because they do not want to discredit it.

 

In addition, school uniforms offer students a unique memory of their studies. For example, after several years study, a photo in uniform on the graduation ceremony would be the best souvenir for a student's school life.

 

To summarize, I believe wearing a school uniform is a essential part of schooling. The function of uniform is beyond its literature meanings and wearing it will benefits the students a lot.

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