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Should teachers be responsible for teaching students to judge right and wrong?
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March 11, 2012
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Some people think that teachers should be responsible for teaching students to judge right and wrong and to behave well. Some say that teachers should only teach students about academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your opinion.


Traditionally, the task of teachers was to use a variety of methods and materials to import some prepared subjects to students. It has been refuted by some people who believe that teaches should convey moral values to students. In my opinion, teachers should be responsible for correcting students’ behavior.

Ethics in plain words means studying and analyzing right from wrong. In fact, students should be aware of right things to do. Without being aware of the distinction between virtues and evils, acceptable and accusable behavior, young generation might become delinquents and criminals, rather than a productive member of society. There is a close link between the modification of young people’s behavior and disruptive behavior in societies. Teacher would reduce the number of juvenile crimes such as teen pregnancy, suicide and bullying through teaching moral values at schools.

Furthermore, ethical principles are associated with the order of a society and quality of life. It is likely to see that young adults who are unaware of standard of morality will end up with breaching their duties even law. Nor they can become happy, successful and productive. A good example to support this is that many recent business frauds, bribery, embezzlement and other illegitimate activities have been found among some well-educated individuals but unethical people. Needless to say, this may cause extremely damage to enterprises and communities.

In conclusion, teachers should play a more active role in the moral development of students, instead of simply importing some knowledge to students. They should pass on moral values and ethical principles to young adults to ensure that their students will be prepared to become productive individuals.

March 13, 2012
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 Hello Brian and welcome to Writefix!

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It has been refuted by some people

The reference 'it' is not very clear, and the word 'refuted' is not very common. It might be easier to just omit the whole phrase.

Some people believe that teachers should convey moral values to students

Or you could make the difference clearer by using 'however'

However, many people feel that teachers should convey moral values to students, in addition to providing academic content.

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Without being aware of the distinction between virtues and evils, acceptable and accusable behavior, young generation might become delinquents and criminals, rather than a productive member of society.

Without being aware of the distinction between virtue and evil, and between acceptable and unacceptable behavior, the young generation might become delinquents and criminals, rather than productive members of society.

Teacher would reduce the number of juvenile crimes  ==> Teachers would reduce the number of juvenile crimes.

Simplify

It is likely to see that young adults who are unaware of standard of morality will end up with breaching their duties even law.

Without good morals, young people will not become good citizens or employees, and may end up in trouble with the law.

Word choice/Word form

  • extremely ==> extreme
  • importing ==> conveying

Overall, just simplify your vocabulary and don't try to use complicated phrases. Just say what you want to say. You have some very good sentences, but some that are a little puzzling. Just try to make each sentence as clear to the reader as possible. This usually means short and simple. 

March 14, 2012
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Many thanks to you. I still do not know where I should plural and single nouns .For example Teacher would reduce the number of juvenile crimes  or a productive member of society.

March 14, 2012
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Hi Brian

Sometimes plurals are the easiest answer. You could write

  • Having a teacher give moral guidance will help the student to learn right from wrong and to become a productive member of society.

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  • Having teachers give moral guidance will help students to learn right from wrong and to become productive members of society.

Both are fine. Using plurals means you don't have to worry about articles!

March 14, 2012
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Hi Enda ,

Its one your golden tip to use more plurals to avoid article mistakes.

Always your suggestion are very helpful.

 

Thanks & Regards

Naheed

March 15, 2012
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