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Task 1 (AC) : Incidents and injuries by different types of transportation
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June 5, 2012
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Hi Enda,

Ive just tried to post a task 1 (AC) with figure here but when I open the topic, I cannot see the figure. 

I've decided to delete this post to avoid distractions, but it seems that I cannot delete the topic 🙂 

June 6, 2012
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Hi Tommy

Sorry about that problem. It's part of an attempt to minimize spam. 

As an experiment, I will allow people to upload pictures to their posts for a few days. Let's see if it works or if there is any problem!  Can you try in a few minutes?

Thanks!

 

(People can already upload pictures to their profile without any problems, but only Sheieuan and a few others have done it!)

June 8, 2012
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The chart below shows numbers of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled (PMT) by transportation type in 2002.

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The bar chart compares the rate of incidents and injuries per 100 million passenger miles travelled by five types of transportation in 2002.

Overall, it can be seen that there were more incidents than injuries in all five types of transportation. The demand response type was responsible for the highest number of incidents and injuries.

Around 225 incidents per 100 million passenger miles travelled were recorded by the demand response transport type, compared to only 76 incidents generated by bus. The figure for the number of injuries was slightly lower in both types, around 173 and 66 for demand response type and bus, respectively.

In contrast, commuter rail, heavy rail and light rail created much less incidents and injuries. Commuter trail generated a smaller number of injuries and incidents than the other four types of transportation, at around 20 incidents and 17 injuries. Although the number of injuries generated by using heavy rail and light rail was similar, at around 35 and 39 respectively, light rail caused significantly more incidents than heavy rail, at around 76 incidents compared with only 51 incidents, respectively.   

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Hi Enda,

I've just posted my report. Could you please have a look at this in your free time?

Thanks a lot !

June 8, 2012
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Hi Tommy

Glad you were able to upload the file.

I was really puzzled by this graph.What is PMT? What is demand-response?

I tracked it down to IELTS-simon.com, but still was not sure what PMT was  and had no idea what 'demand-response' was.

Eventually, I found what demand-response is via Wikipedia and I found the original source of the data via Google Books -  an American book entitled "Status of the Nation's Highways, Bridges and Transit."  Demand-response is like a bus or taxi service, often used in rural areas or where traffic is light, perhaps for a clinic or medical services or old people. There is no fixed route or starting point and the service operates in response to people's requests.

IELTS would not add something that most people have never heard of, like demand-response, so I am sure this is not an IELTS Task 1. Similarly, PMT means passenger miles travelled  -  again IELTS would not hit you with something unexplained like that.

Now that I finally know what demand response is, I can answer the question!

June 8, 2012
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Hi Tommy -  some comments on your Task 1

It's a very good answer.

Your introductory sentence is too similar to the question -  try to reword it if you can.  Don’t work too hard at this -  some of the technical terms can’t be avoided.

Here’s one possible rewrite:

 The chart compares the rate of incidents and injuries on various types of public transport in 2002.

Your overall statement and in fact of Paragraph 1 was excellent.

I would have like a topic sentence or a shorter first sentence in Paragraph 2, perhaps something like this:

Demand response and bus were the most dangerous modes of transport.

I recommend in Task 1 having this pattern:

  • a sentence without a number, followed by a
  • sentence with a number
  • a sentence without a number, followed by a
  • sentence with a number, and so on.

Basically, you give the info or idea in English, and then you back it up with a second sentence with figures.  This pattern is just a guide but it’s helpful. You’ve already written a good sentence like this as your first sentence in Paragraph 3.

 

And I know many people disagree with me, but I do recommend having a conclusion in Task 1. It’s just going to be a one-sentence summary, often a rephrasing of your ‘Overall’ statement, or another key piece of information. It’s also going to be in English (i.e. no numbers!)  Here’s one possible conclusion:

In conclusion, rail was the safest mode of travel in 2002, and bus and  demand-response services the most dangerous.

One thing you could have done for variety is compare figures (twice as many, half as many, three times as many, only a quarter of the figure for rail injuries, etc). But overall it's a very good answer.

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