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What factors contribute to happiness?
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March 9, 2012
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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?


Never will people stop chasing happiness. While all the individuals has their explanation for happiness, everyone struggle to achieve delight throughout their lives. Why is it so hard to define and, and what are the factors in it.

There are almost 7 billion populations in our planet now. Every person is unique. All have their own experiences and backgrounds. It is natural to see there are so many different views amongst people. Even when two people share the same ideas, they definitely have some tiny detail difference between them.

Some people believe the fortune is the symbol of delight. They define the happiness for money and equate the rich to the sense of fulfillment. Only when their pristine, specific demand of materials is filled could they be happy. However, others, insist the true happiness is the rich in spirit. Instead of the dazzling and luxurious handbags of Chanel, they are into something which brings heart peace or something expands their outlook.

I personally think the key to stay happy is to make ourselves be easily satisfied. By that I mean that people should avoid always being greedy and over-ambitious. Second, making more friends and keeping a tide family bond conducive to delight as well. Due to these people will go shopping, picnic, journey, and even adventure with us, through these entertainments we can easily forget the worries and pressures. Also, happiness derives from the freedom. It needs us to listen to our heart , be courageous and steadfast enough to do what we want and get what we need, of course, in the circumstance of obeying laws and regulars.

Perhaps people would never reach the agreement of what happiness is, but at least, one thing is for sure, everyone wants to be pleased. Then, follow my instructions.

March 24, 2012
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Hi Alison

Thanks for this essay

I just want to draw attention to how it is organized. I like your choice of organization very much, but it's a little unusual - most of the essays in this forum are 3773.

Let me just summarize the main idea of your paragraphs here:

  1. Intro: Everyone is looking for happiness, but what is it?
  2. Paragraph 2: Everybody is different, so happiness means different things to everyone
  3. Paragraph 3: What some people think brings happiness: (A) material things, such as Chanel! (B) internal things, such as peace or growth  
  4. Paragraph 4: What the writer thinks -  three examples (A) being easily satisfied, (B) having friends, and (C) being free
  5. Conclusion: Restatement of intro, and some advice for the future!  

There are some sentences and phrases that need tidying up, but I just wanted to show that not every essay has to be 3773 layout.

Thanks again!

Anyone want to tidy up one or two of the small errors?

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