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Why do some parents educate their children at home?
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May 13, 2012
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Some parents choose to educate their children at home. Why is this and what are some of the benefits and disadvantages?

 

There are a number of people prefer to teach their children by themselves though it is not common. Could children gain a lot, or just lose the chance of being educated well? In my essay, I will analyze the reasons for why some parents rather their children study at home, and indicate the merits and drawbacks.

 

Initially, in my opinion, it is personal concept that causes this phenomenon. Some adults are high education level. Possessing rich knowledge, they think that they can fully competent in imparting knowledge, and their children can have the one-to-one tuition. Apart from this, if the family is living in a remote village, or somewhere only having few schools and places, parents would educate their next generation at home.  

 

Surely, children being taught at home can benefit from this approach. Unlike studying in a big class, where teacher is impossible to pay attention to every student, a child receiving education at home is the only focus of the parents. They make the most appropriate teaching plan for their children, and good learning effects are often guaranteed. Also, it reduces the time and energy which waste on commuting. Children may find it more efficient to learn.

 

Staying away from schools has disadvantages though. First, the biggest problem is that parents are not versatile. They cannot master knowledge in every aspect. It is therefore study-at-home children could not touch as more subjects as their school counterparts. Second, parents would use unsuitable inculcated methodology because of lack of formal training. Third, it would render children isolated. Far apart from schools, they have few chances to play with their peers, which could obstruct the development of interpersonal skill. 

 

To conclude, parents do not sent their children to schools for reasons, privately and socially. And while it has some obvious advantages, I think disadvantages are significantly outweighed.

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Howdy, Enda!

 

I came across a problem when writing this topic.

 

When the fist time I wrote the reasons for why some parents educate their children themselves, I had many ideas. So I wrote very a very long paragraph. I specify every point. (explanations and examples, blah blah blah). Then when I start to write the benefits, I found every point I could figure out was used in the 'reason' paragraph. I had nothing new to write in this part.  So I had to edit the 'reason' paragraph, deleting many sentences and ideas, so as to use them in the 'benefit' part.

 

I want to enquire that if I could combine 'reasons' and 'benefits' in one paragraph? You know, if I came across this situation then it was impossible for me to edit it like this time, because of the short time. So, could I use the structure like this:

 

There are many reasons. First, (……………). Second, (…………). Third, (…………). And the reasons which I illustrated above are also the benefits children can get from………………

 

Hoping for tips. Thank you!

May 13, 2012
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Second question:

 

This website-http://www.online-utility.org/english/readability_test_and_improve.jsp lists some sentences which I should rewreite so as to improve the readability. Is it necessarily to be right? Would some sentences are fine but it wrongly reports them? Anyway, even it is completely correct, I don't know why I should rewrite because obviously the tool doesn't tell the reasons. So I have no idea how to rewrite it.

 

And what is this term 'Flesch Reading Ease' mean?

May 13, 2012
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Hi Alison

I'm a bit busy today, but I played with your essay on the http://www.online-utility.org/english/readability_test_and_improve.jsp  site.

It hates long sentences. Even when I corrected the sentences which it found in your essay and ran the new essay through, it still didn't like them because they are long. So it's possible that it might suggest rewriting sentences which are fine.

But it's still good to rewrite long sentences and try to break them up.

One thing it does as well is that it sometimes ignores mistakes in short sentences. For example your sentence "Some adults are high education level" should read "Some adults are well-educated" and it should really be joined to the next sentence. However, the application doesn't pick this up.

So you are right - it's a little frustrating.  It really looks at sentence length, and while this is a very important thing to fix -  we need to reduce our sentence length -  it's only one problem.

I still think it's great. It has almost never found a sentence that is correct, because most candidates get short sentences correct but mess up with longer ones. So it's a useful tool, but I can see why it's frustrating for you to use.

It's the equivalent of the plain red underline from the teacher with no comment!

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Hello, Enda.

 

It is ok, really. You hava helped me a lot. I know you have many businesses to do in your daily life. So it is very kind of you to take time to comment our essays. You can comment it days later. I really don't mind. I would read other's topics first and be free myself. ^-^

 

Regards

May 14, 2012
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Hi Alison

Here's your essay with some of those sentences edited a little:

Some people prefer to teach their children themselves. Do these children gain a lot, or do they lose the chance of being educated well? In my essay, I will suggest why some parents prefer their children to study at home, and indicate the merits and drawbacks.

Home schooling may be the parent's choice or may be due to geography. Some well-educated adults feel confident to teach their children. However, families living in villages or remote areas may be forced to educate children at home.

Children can definitely benefit from being taught at home. In a big class, it’s impossible for the teacher to pay attention to every student. However, home-schooled children receive complete attention from their parents. They make the appropriate teaching plans for their children, so good results are more likely. Less time and energy are also wasted on commuting, so children may learn more efficiently.

Staying away from schools has disadvantages, though. First, the biggest problem is that parents are not versatile. They cannot master every subject. Home-schooled children may not cover as many subjects as their counterparts. Second, parents may use unsuitable methodology because of lack of formal training. Third, it could render children isolated. They may have few chances to play with their peers, and this could affect their social skills.

Parents need to think carefully about the social and educational impact of home schooling. While it has some advantages, I think isolation and the limits of parental knowledge outweigh them.

But if you put this essay into http://www.online-utility.org/english/readability_test_and_improve.jsp, it will still highlight these sentences are being more difficult to read!

  • In my essay, I will suggest why some parents prefer their children to study at home, and indicate the merits and drawbacks.
  • However, families living in villages or remote areas may be forced to educate children at home.
  • While it has some advantages, I think isolation and the limits of parental knowledge outweigh them.
  • Parents need to think carefully about the social and educational impact of home schooling.
  • Less time and energy are also wasted on commuting, so children may learn more efficiently.
  • Second, parents may use unsuitable methodology because of lack of formal training.

So I agree it can be a little frustrating. You are editing for style and conciseness, rather than to fix mistakes.

Compare these two Before and After pictures from http://www.read-able.com - your essay 'before' and 'after' editing the sentences the application found:

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It doesn't seem like a major improvement, but it's an improvement! 

To answer the question about paragraphs - yes you could combine them. 

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