So close! That's a really great score in the reading.
I notice you are doing the General Training module. Make sure that for Part 1 you have practiced lots of simple letters. Here are some tips for candidates writing Task 1 in the GT module.
Task 1 Writing: General Training
Task 1 in the General Track is not the same as in the Academic Track - instead of a graph or visual data, you usually have to write a letter in response to a situation.
There aren't examples for Task 1 General Training on this site. There are some here and here, but I haven't had enough time to look at the quality of the examples.
The letter is often to a company, or a store, or a hotel, or a landlord, or a university, or an airline, but it can also be social. You have to describe a situation and explain what happened and what you want to happen - the action you want the recipient to take.
Make sure you answer all the parts. Tick or mark the bullet points on the question as you write them.
Don't write too much!
Some candidates pick very complicated situations. Don't. It's not a creative essay. It's seeing if you can deal with an everyday situation by describing a problem and requesting action or an alternative.
Be careful with tone. This is a common problem, being too informal or being too formal (it's a letter so it should NOT be TOO formal) or even worse, changing tone. For example, don't write "I would respectfully request" in one part of the letter and then "If you don't solve this problem I'm going to move to another company" in another part. In general, avoid threats or demands!
Don't use any. None. At all. Just because you work in ICU and a patient has a TIA does not mean we all understand. Spell it out for us. Don't get excited if the situation in the question is very similar to your work situation. Don't be too technical.
Don't read books about how to write letters
Avoid tired old phrases, passives, and cliches from letter-writing books like
- Per your letter of the 15th
- Reference our meeting on the 15th inst
- Your letter of the 12th is at hand
- Refer your letter of Tuesday 22nd,
- Awaiting the favour of a reply
- Yours in anticipation
- Yours (in anything)
- It has been observed that...
- Kindly be informed that...
- Recently it has been brought to my attention that...
Avoid all idioms and cliches. Do not use the word 'kudos' (if you don't know the word, consider yourself lucky). Your letter should be matter-of-fact and businesslike, unless the situation is really social. If you work in an office and write letters, forget them all and write your own sentences.
You can say "I look forward to hearing from you" or "I hope we can solve this problem in the next few days."
Use bullet points if necessary - but make sure you write full sentences for each of the bullet points. In fact, I think I'm going to regret saying use bullet points, but they are useful in the real world.
Don't give an address. It won't count in your total number of words. Neither will your name.
The first sentence is absolutely crucial. Say what you would like
"I would like to
- request a/that
- complain about
- inquire about
- inform you about/that
- meet with you
- request a meeting
- return some damaged items
- thank you for
- reschedule our meeting which
- transfer ...... to, etc"
Don't be overpolite. There is no need to use words like 'reputed company' or to try to butter up the company or recipient. Don't praise just to balance a complaint. Be businesslike and to the point. Don't grovel. But don't demand too strongly either.
Don't say "You/your company/airline/office/manager/ must take some action immediately."
Don't say "appropriate authorities"
Don't say or imply "bad things will happen"
Overall, short is good. You only have 20 minutes. Spend 5 minutes planning, and write for 13-14 minutes or so, then take a one-minute break before Task 2. Be consistent in tone - don't threaten, but don't whine or beg. Say what you want, be polite and keep it short.
You don't need extra paper for Task 1. Trust me on this. Just write 150 words and leave it at that. If you can't do it in 150 words, the situation you have planned is too complicated. Keep it short and simple.