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Is behaviour in schools getting worse? What can we do about it?
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December 11, 2011
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Behaviour in schools is getting worse.Explain the causes and effects of this problem,and suggest some possible solutions.

One cause of there bad behaviour is the lack of discipline in many schools.For example,many schools dont have clear rules which the students can follow and as a result student lack good behaviour in society.Another cause of bad behviour is large classes.For example,students are not able to concentrate in classes with large number of students and at the same time it is also difficult for the teachers to make the class understand in a  better way.One of the most important causes of bad behaviour is leniency.For example,students want all the things their friends have without thinking whether their parents can afford them or not.Despite of making the child understand the situation,the parents get the thing for them which later leads to out worse situation.

 

The following steps can be taken to overcome these problems.Firstly,there must be some clear rules set up by the school authorities.For example,proper timings and schedules for the classes,certain rules regarding attendence and lateness policies must be brought to the notice of parents and students.Secondly,teachers must follow certain steps in order to help the students to gain confidence and overcome their mistakes.Finally,parents have the important role to play.For example,they should not be so lenient.They should try to make the child understand how to manage with the things they have and be thankful to God for what they have.

 

In conclusion,to utterly solve his problem,we must check out the causes behind each case and have appropriate actions against them.Government,schools and families should cooperate to find the best solutions to these problems.I emphasize that everyone is good when they are born.It is what happens later that forms the person into one whose behaviour is good or bad.

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In last paragraph In conclusion.......................................is good when they are born....

sorry for typing it wrong.

December 12, 2011
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rose_12 said:

In last paragraph In conclusion.......................................is good when they are born....

sorry for typing it wrong.

No problem - you should be able to go back and change your post for a while after you submit it. In any case, I've changed it for you.

December 12, 2011
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Hello Rose_12

 

Thanks for this essay.

 

Introduction

 

Did you have an introduction somewhere else? Your essay needs an introduction. It should restate the question or give some background, or look at both sides, but it should definitely have a thesis sentence which says what you are going to do. Have a look at Thesis sentences here: http://writefix.com/?page_id=1889 and at Introductions here: http://writefix.com/?page_id=1715 and see the Grammar column.

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Thanks for the information.I really missed the thesis statement there, I will try to cover this weak area in next essay. Thanks for the links. They are very useful!!!!!

December 17, 2011
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Thanks Rose_12 - welcome!

rose_12 said:

Thanks for the information.I really missed the thesis statement there, I will try to cover this weak area in next essay. Thanks for the links. They are very useful!!!!!

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