I will take my final exams on Monday and I wrote an essay as training. Could somebody do me a favour and correct and mark it please? Or at least tell me what you think about the structure and my paragraphs? The topic is in the title.

More and more people in our country think that physical education at school should be replaced by some “more important” subjects like mathematics or some languages. But in my opinion physical education should not be abolished. So sports classes should not be dropped for helping students to concentrate on more important subjects.

First of all, teenagers need to do more sports. So physical education at school is indispensable. Young people often do not do much sport at home and that makes it even more necessary that students do sports at school. Even if some teenagers wanted to do sports at home, the often do not have the time to do sports, because they have to study or they have to do other things. Another important point is that today’s youth prefers watching TV or playing computer games rather than doing sports.

Secondly, our society mostly does not get how much fun sport can be, especially the younger generations. In my opinion schools are responsible to teach teenagers that doing sport is fun and that it is as much fun as watching TV. Furthermore some teenagers complain that they do not have time for learning, social contacts and sports. However, they do not seem to know that sports together normally is more fun than just having conversations over the phone or sitting around in a restaurant and drinking some coffee together. Thirdly, sport releases endorphins which lead to a feeling of happiness and help to concentrate on learning afterwards.

Finally physical education at school is a welcome distraction from lessons in the classroom. When school is stressful and the young people do not have time to do sports at home or always have to learn and concentrate for hours, one or two hours sports in school can fulfil a small wonder. Besides helping students to forget about the stress, it helps them to concentrate and refocus on their studies again. Another very important fact is that sports encourage special skills and attributes which can be very useful in their later life. For example sport helps students to improve team spirit and to get ambitious.

To conclude, sport lessons at school should not be abandoned because of several reasons: Sport helps students to concentrate again and it is necessary for their health. It is also a welcome distraction from a school day and it improves several useful skills and attributes.

Thank you 😉
Matthi_26