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What are some of the problems of tourism?
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December 28, 2011
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      In the present scenario, many countries are considered famous for its tourism. Their major source of income seems to be significantly by tourism. It does has pros and cons which has to be analysed.

       Countries profit by attracting people worldwide with their interesting historic monuments, man-made wonders and nature beauty. The economy of the country increases by means of transportation tariffs, cost of accomodation and food etc for the visitors. The fame and preciousness of the places are spread worldwide attracting many more tourists. It does gives employment opportunities for the localites. To site an example, Dubai is one of the popular tourist sites of the world. It was considered as just a desert, but it earns more with its attractions like Burj Dubai, a man-made tallest building turned the world's attention. It does has ancient historic museums, malls, 7 star hotels too.

      However, there are disadvantages caused by the tourists. One of the most important problems will be the damage caused to the tourist spots like ancient signatures by the visitors. Secondly, they spoil the culture of the local society. Additionally overcrowding does prevail due to more number of foreigners. Moreover, the tourist spot becomes the point of attack for the terrorists and cause disaster to the country.

     Though there are problems encountering with the tourism, still countries welcome the visitors to improve their financial status. So it is the duty of the local government to promote policies and restrictions on tourism to provide safety for its people.

       

January 4, 2012
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Hello Sara and welcome to Writefix!

 

A few points

 

Does:  Avoid the word 'does'  - it should be used for emphasis only. 

  1. It does has pros and cons -  It has pros and cons.
  2. It does gives employment opportunities - It provides employment.

 

Empty words: Avoid words which do not contribute meaning

In the present scenario, --> Today

Agreement -  check that verbs agree with the subject of the sentence:

  1. many countries are famous for its tourism --> many countries are famous for [their] tourism
  2. It does has pros and cons which has to be analysed --> It has pros and cons which have to be analysed
  3. Moreover, the tourist spot becomes the point of attack for the terrorists and cause causes disaster to the country. c

Word Form

  1. nature beauty --> natural beauty
  2. The fame and preciousness of the places are spread worldwide attracting many more tourists. 
    Change to: 
    The more tourists that visit, the more famous the destination becomes.
  3. It does gives employment opportunities for the localites -->Tourism provides employment for local people/locals.

 

Although/but

Though there are problems encountering with the tourism, still countries welcome the visitors to improve their financial status.

Change to:

Although some problems can be encountered from tourism, most countries still enocurage tourism as a means of improving their economies

 

The economy of the country increases by means of transportation tariffs, cost of accomodation and food etc for the visitors.

Change to:

The economy of the country benefits from the money that tourists spend on planes, buses, and taxis and in restaurants and hotels.

Try to avoud using 'etc.' Have three or more items in a list. It's an opportunity to show your command of vocabulary!

January 10, 2012
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Thanks for your time sir. I am impressed by the method of your correction. I realize the mistakes which so far I was thinking to be the right one. It really helps many of us to progress in the style of writing. Happy new year.

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