Hi Linh and welcome to Writefix!
Your essay shows that you are not afraid to pick a difficult topic!
Don't worry about cause/effect - people worry too much about whether essays are compare/contrast, cause/effect or opinion. As far as I can see the differences between these types are minimal, and writers can use all these types of structure and vocabulary in IELTS opinion essays.
I hope you don't mind if I say that your introduction and conclusion are the weakest parts of your essay. You have some very interesting ideas and vocabulary in the middle, but hundreds of thousands of people are going to have the same introduction and conclusion as you.
It seems sometimes that no matter what topic the IELTS examiners come up with, it is always a 'contentious issue', a 'heated debate,' 'thorny problem,' a 'controversial topic.' or a worrying trend. And, amazingly, there is always a 'recent survey' to support the argument, or else 'scientists have shown' something to be true... 🙂
Be especially careful of chunks of text which could go into any essay, for example in your last paragraph:
To sum up, there is the number of explanations and consequences related to this thorny issue. If these above mentioned measures are properly adopted, they are bound to be of desired effect.
Try to make these specific to the topic, and try to keep your writing going forward.
To sum up, tougher parenting, increased government spending on schools, and better discipline in schools could all help reduce crime among women. If women play a central role in family lie, we need to tackle the problem of female crime at the source in order to secure a safer future for our children.
I'm not going to discuss your examples in Paragraphs 2-4 right now - perhaps someone else would like to comment on these? - but perhaps one suggestion might be not to over-dramatize: yes, perhaps more women are being arrested for stealing, but does this lead to surge in female serial killers or murderers? What is meant by female crime? Failing to pay car insurance, perhaps, or cheating on the weighing scales in their grocery stores?
As you can see, I'm more interested in your ideas than concerned about your English!