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        	        	<description><![CDATA[<p>Hi Brian</p>
<p> </p>
<p>Well, the 'memorized phrases' are the phrases highlighted in yellow at <a title="Tired tired tired" href="/?page_id=2722/about-this-forum/some-people-prefer-to-eat-at-food-stands-or-restaurants#p414" target="_blank">the top of the page</a>. Here are many more!</p>
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<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">It has been observed that</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">Everybody knows that</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">I personally feel/believe/think/</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">In point of fact</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">To illustrate</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">To expand further</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">To develop this theme further</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">Notwithstanding</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">Although there are many advantages for X, there are also many disadvantages.</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">I am in favor of the question that "Should rich countries help developing countries?"</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">I am against the question that "Should rich countries help developing countries?"</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">As it has advantages, it also has disadvantages</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">I will explain in my essay</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">This I will explain in my essay.</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">As I have shown above</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">This for several reason. Which I will explain.</span></li>
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<p>Most of these are not wrong (except for 10-16) but they are old, tired, hackneyed, worn out, overused, dead, cliched, lazy - and do not contribute to your writing. </p>
<p>IELTS examiners know these phrases and sentences and wake up screaming them in their sleep. And there are many more! People like different ones in different countries! </p>
<p>Yes, <strong><span style="color: #800000">you lose marks</span></strong> if you use them - particularly if you use them in the wrong way. Even if a writer uses them <span style="color: #800000"><strong>the right way</strong></span> and the rest of the essay is rubbish, adding them won't help him or her to get a higher mark.</p>
<p>There's another problem: long memorized phrases or chunks may not even be counted in word length, so you could write 250 words but still be <span style="color: #800000"><strong>penalized for being under-length</strong></span>.</p>
<p>Here's a typical example:  </p>
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"X" is a hotly debated issue in the world recently. This has many advantages but it also has disadvantages. Notwithstanding, in my essay, I will explain my opinion and give the solution.</p>
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<p> No! No! Nooooooooooooooooo!  </p>
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        	<title>Brian_mcclaine on Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants</title>
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        	        	<description><![CDATA[<p>Hi writefix,</p>
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<p>You noticed a very good point. As most canidates who seek to get a high score , do not have any information about what examiners think when they read and score their essays, and also because it is very common thesedays to see that institutes and other teachers try to force students put uncommon and pompous words and already-memorized phrases , our essays turn to an ackward essay. It also may because of most of us started learning English with Cambridge Reading Books for IELTS with high level of writing. Infact, we try to write like them to get more score but unfortunately because of poor grammar and knowlege it is going to become a problem. I think as you already mentioned we should think on conveying our meaning then think of formation and high grammmar.</p>
<p>And about those memorized sentences ( I myself do it ) I was wondering whether it is regarded as a memorized. Since I know that at the bottom of every papar of essay written "memorized" . Could you describe it to us which phrases for example " as far as I am concerned" or it is very controversial issue and so forth are considered in term of memorized?</p>
<p>Thank you for your time</p>
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        	        	<description><![CDATA[<p>thanxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx so much for your advise you know i always use these phrase, but know i will not you them ever ever.</p>
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        	        	<description><![CDATA[<p>Hi Alison</p>
<p>Exactly! Too many writers (not just students) use them, and the phrases become meaningless and tired.</p>
<p>Also, many people studying for IELTS try to memorize them and just use them randomly, dumping them into their essays like the caviar or gold I mentioned yesterday. It doesn't help</p>
<p>Often examiners see papers where the memorized phrases are perfect but everything else is rubbish. The phrases don't help to get a better score.</p>
<p>The more common problem is that people think they MUST have these phrases. They try to remember them and get all mixed up.  </p>
<p>Sure, if someone can use them correctly AND make them relevant to the specific essay topic, then that's fine. But if you are so skilled in writing, why use these tired old phrases?</p>
<p>Here are two examples where the phrases are accurate AND made relevant to the topic.</p>
<p><span style="color: #800000"><strong>Obesity</strong></span></p>
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No one can deny that obesity is now a major problem in western countries, with over half of some populations either overweight or seriously obese. Moreover, as more countries develop and adopt western eating habits, obesity is set to be a major global problem in the near future.</p>
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<p><span style="color: #800000"><strong>History in school</strong></span></p>
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It is said that people who don't know their past cannot have a future. I agree with this statement, but I think history should be only one of many related subject taught in schools. Children should learn about their art, their music, and their language, rather than just a boring list of wars and prime ministers.</p>
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        	        	<description><![CDATA[<p>Hi, Enda, why should the phases be avoided?</p>
<p> </p>
<p>like:</p>
<ul>
<li>the pros outweigh the cons</li>
<li>Moreover</li>
<li>
<ul>
<li>No-one can deny that</li>
<li>It is recently noted that</li>
<li>I agree with this statement</li>
<li>I will give my opinion</li>
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</li>
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<p>some problems? because too many students uses these?</p>
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        	        	<description><![CDATA[<p>Hi Lazer505 and welcome to Writefix. I hope you can help out some other people in the forum here.</p>
<p>Just a couple of quick points</p>
<p><span style="color: #800000"><strong>Tired old phrases and cliches</strong></span> </p>
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<span style="background-color: #ffff00">As much debated issue</span> these days is whether eat at home or restaurants</p>
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<p>No, it's <span style="color: #800000"><strong>NOT</strong></span> a much-debated issue! I have never debated it with anyone. Most people haven't sat around and said "Is eating out better than eating at home?" I'm fairly sure you have never had a discussion in class about whether eating at home is better than having a Big Mac or a falafel sandwich.</p>
<p><span style="color: #800000"><strong>Avoid</strong></span> <span style="color: #800000"><strong>phrases like:</strong></span></p>
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<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">a hotly-contested issue </span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">a hotly-debated issue</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">a controversial issue (especially 'recently')</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">contentious issue</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">the pros outweigh the cons</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">the cons outweigh the pros</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">weigh up the pros and cons (any sentence with "pros and cons" or "outweigh")</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">in a nutshell</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">to pen down (or up)</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">a double-edged sword</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">a rat race</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">No-one can deny that</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">It is recently noted that</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">I agree with this statement</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">I will give my opinion</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">I am in favor of this for many reasons</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">I am against this for many reasons</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">There are two sides to this issue</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">I am agree with this statement </span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">I am agree with the statement that "Eating in restaurant better than eat at home"</span></li>
<li><span style="background-color: #ffff00">Moreover</span></li>
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<p>No IELTS examiner ever wants to see these phrases again. Ever.</p>
<p><strong><span style="color: #800000">So what can I write?</span></strong></p>
<ol>
<li>You could say what some people do, and what some other people do "<em>Some people love fast-food like McDonalds or eating in college cafeterias. Others prefer...</em>" </li>
<li>You could ask a question: "<em>Why do so many people enjoy eating in restaurants?  Is it because...</em>"</li>
<li>You could talk about the past and the present: "<em>In the past, most people ate at home. Today, however, many people enjoy eating out.</em>"</li>
<li>See <a title="introductions" href="/?page_id=1715" target="_blank">more examples of introductions here</a>.</li>
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<p><span style="color: #800000"><strong>Thesis Sentence</strong></span></p>
<p>Your essay gets much better with your good thesis sentence. You wrote:</p>
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For my part, I agree with those who <span style="background-color: #ffff00">state</span> eat at food stands or restaurants for many reasons such as <span style="background-color: #ffff00">that</span> would <span style="background-color: #ffff00">safe</span> the time, it is delicious, and we do not have to clean after finishing the meal.</p>
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<p>You gave your opinion and you gave us an overview of some of the main points (one side only, though). Some small changes:  </p>
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For my part, I agree with eating at food stands or restaurants because it saves times, it's delicious, and we don't have to clean up after finishing the meal.</p>
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<p><span style="color: #800000"><strong>Topic Sentence: </strong><strong>Paragraph 2</strong></span></p>
<p>In Paragraph 2, you wrote a topic sentence but you didn't get it quite right. </p>
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Some people in favor of <span style="background-color: #ffff00">that</span> eat at the restaurants for many <span style="background-color: #ffff00">aspects</span>.</p>
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<p>Why not just say it in your own words? What does 'that' mean? Forget about 'the statement' or 'agree' or 'in favour' - just say what you want to say.</p>
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<ol>
<li>People eat in restaurants for many reasons.  OR  </li>
<li>Some people love eating in restaurants.  OR</li>
<li>I love eating in restaurants. </li>
<li>I will tell you why I love eating out. OR</li>
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<div><span style="color: #800000"><strong>Topic Sentence: Paragraph 3</strong></span></div>
<div> </div>
<div>In Paragraph Three, your topic sentence is good, but it only deals with one problem - the cost. You wrote</div>
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On the other hand, eating at restauran<span style="background-color: #ffff00">t go</span>ing to waste their money.</p>
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<p>In the rest of Paragraph Three you write about money and then about disease. So, your topic sentence above should change to something like </p>
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On the other hand, eating at restaurants wastes money <span style="color: #800000"><strong>and can be unhealthy</strong></span>.</p>
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<p>Now the topic sentence tells the reader everything that will be in your paragraph.</p>
<p><span style="color: #800000"><strong>Conclusion</strong></span></p>
<p>Your conclusion is good. It's well organized and gives both sides. I would change the last sentence (I hate the word 'con' and the word 'pro')</p>
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I prefer to eat at restaurant <span style="background-color: #ffff00">how ever the cons is. </span></p>
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<p>Just say why you eat at restaurants - in different words, if you can. Summarize (give the main points of) your essay:</p>
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I prefer to eat at restaurants because <span style="color: #800000"><strong>I don't have much time and I love the taste</strong></span>. Now, if you will excuse me, I am going to have some KFC.</p>
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<p>OK, you don't need the last part, but the important thing is to write, without trying to remember 'IELTS' phrases. You will be fine!  </p>
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        	        	<description><![CDATA[<p>Some people prefer to eat at food stands or restaurants. Other people prefer to prepare and eat food at home. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer</p>
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<p>As much debated issue these days is whether eat at home or restaurants. In our daily live, we have been eating three meals per day. Some people prefer eating at restaurants rather than eating at home, while other opposite that. For my part, I agree with those who state eat at food stands or restaurants for many reasons such as that would safe the time, it is delicious, and we do not have to clean after finishing the meal.</p>
<p>Some people in favor of that eat at the restaurants for many aspects. Frist of all, if they eat at restaurants, that will safe their time especially for people who do not have free time to prepare their meals. For instance, since I was in the university, I had not been having enough time to prepare my lunch. In that time, I always went to restaurant for ate my lunch. Second, it is good for people who do not know how can they cook to eat at restaurant. Third, after they eat at restaurant, they will not clean the dishes or kitchen, that would be great for lazy people.</p>
<p>On the other hand, eating at restaurant going to waste their money. For example, my friend always eats at restaurant, she spend 500 hundred each month. Thus, she borrow money for her friend, or sometimes, she get a job to cover her expenses. Furthermore, restaurants usually add some chemical  substances to make their food more testy and delicious. As a result, that affected on our bodies and healthy, may cause serious disease such as cancers and tumors.</p>
<p>In conclusion, eating at restaurants has advantage for people who do not have free time to prepare the meal. Moreover, for people how do not have any idea about preparing the food. However, eating at restaurant may waste your money and cause health problem. I prefer to eat at restaurant how ever the cons is.</p>
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