And thank you to highlight those area where i am weak to justify with essay..

I hope to rewrite reasonably good essay by taking your points into account..

Thank you once again..

After reading your essay what I can conclude that who limited yourself to use of animals only which does not justify this topic fully. further, you concentrated how modes of doing things have changed instead of arguing on why we should keep our traditional skills?

I am suggesting certain points - 

a) traditional skills - connect to our history / past - helps in understanding evolution and further development -e.g. turmeric - used as antiseptic and how it is used in making medicines. 

b) skills help in development of new and better technology -cooking technology - e.g. in hilly area people used to cook food at higher temperature in vessel due to difference in air pressure which leads to invention of Pressure cooker.

c) helps in improving and getting inspired - We can learn from our mistakes made by ancestor - e.g. Govt policies and good administration skills are inspired and based on policies in the time of Kings like Akbar (in India), Napoleon, etc.

 On these points you can further elaborate. 

Hope you find this useful :) 

Best of luck and I am sure you gonna rock in ur language test. 

I think my essay need to be updated because as you guys are guiding me there are some important modification required..

I wish to bring my essay with meaningful and up to requirement of IELTS..

Regards

Divx

in my personal opinion, i feel something need to be concerned:

1 horses are animals, not human's skills, so i think it is not fit requirement

2 your examples need to be mogical and detailed. i feel this structure may be much better:

  theme sentense1... example1.... further disscussion for topic sentense.

 theme sentense2... example1.... further disscussion for topic sentense.

i feel need reorganise your disscussion parts, make them logical

I hope u good luck. I ll take at that time too.

It is very important to keep traditional skills and ways of life alive because progressive prospects of today's technological development is based on our history of past. (The sentence is a bit long, delete because) If we preserve traditional skills, we will give a chance to ourselves to transfer that information to next generation as they will not be known about prime source of technological development they are using (use).

Again the sentence is too long, I rarely have interest to read the essay below. Try to cut it down.

However, this is the fast growing technological era, where (era is time, you cannot use where here, replace it to when) most of previous ways of doing things have changed. Nowadays it sounds very unusual to use horses, and oxen, for ploughing purpose. Besides that people do not use old means of transportation such as horses and camels, though (you are not change the idea here) technology has brought faster and reliable means of transportation like cars and planes.

In addition, people now mostly use e-mail to send important files, documents and letters to other people around the world. Whereas the usage of sending letters through post has sharply decreased as it is the time consuming process and insecure as well.

After all, transnational skills can be kept alive such as nowadays horses use in different games which can remind us the way horses contributed mean of to traveling and ploughing. So we can represent our skills in different forms to preserve them.

To sum up, it is a reality that ways of doing things have been completely switched on by new advanced technology only because of its perfection. However we still need to remind ourselves how we have achieved achieve this place,; therefore, there should be representation of traditional skill and ways of life in order to make us aware about the history of our past.

Hey dude, I read ur essay, its fine.

1. Write an thesis sentence

2, Pay attention to the puntuation

3. Some tiny grammar mistakes

4. Long sentences

Best regards,

David

Due to the development of modern technology traditional skills and ways of life have disappeared which is the result of switching on old means with new. Some people say we should keep traditional skills alive as it contains history of our past. Though other people think, keeping them alive as profession is not possible but as a game, skills can be kept alive.

It is very important to keep traditional skills and ways of life alive because progressive prospects of today's technological development is based on our history of past. If we preserve traditional skills we give a chance ourselves to transfer that information to next generation as they will not be known about prime source of technological development they are using.

However, this is the fast growing technological era, where most of previous ways of doing things have changed. Nowadays it sounds very unusual to use horses, oxen, for ploughing purpose. Besides that people do not use old means of transportation such as horses and camels, though technology has brought faster and reliable means of transportation like cars and planes.

In addition, people now mostly use e-mail to send important files, documents and letters to other people around the world. Whereas the usage of sending letters through post has sharply decreased as it is time consuming process and insecure as well.

After all, transnational skills can be kept alive as nowadays horses use in different games which can remind us the way horses contributed mean of traveling and ploughing. So we can represent our skills in different forms to preserve them.

To sum up, it is a reality that ways of doing things have been completely switched on by new advanced technology only because of its perfection. However we still need to remind ourselves how we have achieved this place, therefore there should be representation of traditional skill and ways of life in order to make us aware about the history of our past.