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8:23 pm
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October 21, 2011

First of all language is the main tool of communication between people .It mostly carries their history and civility. So when we maintain it, by the way we preserve their civility, history and their characters. Moreover, variation gives merit to our life . If we maintain every culture as it is and preserve its characters,we really enrich our humanbeing history and allow our civilization to prosper and flourish .
But on the other hand, we can not live enveloped or isolated from the outer wold, and prevent communication with others to preserve our civil, langauge, or traditions . just to protect them as we are afraid that it my disappears or gradualy undergos degradation. Especially in the21th century due to the internet we live in a global village . We will be unable to control communication. Interaction between different cultures and civilizations become a must .
From another point of view, communication and interaction between people improve our life to the better . It should not be stagnant for ever with out any change. For instance, we have China which was isolated from the western world and enclosed to its culture and traditions . The governments were following the communist rules . but, now they start to change and opened to the western world. Starts certain Economical trades with them. Become less obsessive about their traditions and culture due to the internet and new generation communication with other people.
To sum up, each country should maintain its langauga, dialects, and culture as far as they can and in the same time It should come into direct contact with other civilizations and cultures to allow their life prosperity
1:02 pm

Hi Alia
I reformatted your essay again, sorry - if you use the small button in the toolbar with the "W" you can paste directly from Microsoft Word so you don't lose your paragraphs.
This essay is well organized and your ideas are clear and developed.
I am just going to look at a couple of grammar and vocabulary points
Fragments
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Starts certain Economical trades with them. Become less obsessive about their traditions and culture due to the internet and new generation communication with other people.
These could change to:
Some of these governments have started to trade with others and open up their economies. They have also become less obsessive about their traditions and culture, and allowed their people to access the internet
Vocab
I'm not sure about the word 'civility': I might use 'tradition' or 'heritage' or something else. Otherwise I like this essay and I think you've worked hard with it. I liked the examples you used.
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