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Should animals be used in testing new drugs and procedures?
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November 12, 2011
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Discussing animal testing often arouses a lot of negative emotions. As a medical student, I worked with animals in a laboratory. In my opinion, using animals in testing new drugs and procedures is unavoidable. 

Medical knowledge is improving at a fast rate, nevertheless there are still many diseases that cannot be cured with conventional medication. This leads to a constant search for new remedies. In addition, the application of new technological procedures seems to be promising. These new treatments may not have the intended effect or have dangerous side effects and this needs to be tested before they can be used on a large scale. Many new drugs and procedures are withdrawn during the testing phase and this emphasizes the importance of testing.

During my time as a medical student at the department of experimental cardiology I worked with Yorkshire pigs. As the hearts of these animals resemble human hearts, we used them to test the effect of local drug delivery on infarct size. The conditions in an animal experiment are strictly controlled and all procedures have to be approved by a national board before they can be used. The researchers not only have to make clear why this study should be performed, but also show that they use proper sedation.

Many people don’t know this and just think animal testing is cruel. Researchers should give more information to the public why and how they perform their studies in order to gain more understanding. There are also people who think that computer simulations can replace tests in animals. Unfortunately, this technique is not yet reliable enough. Simulations with existing drugs may show what we already know, but when new drugs and procedures are tested unforeseen problems cannot be anticipated by the computer system.  

In conclusion, if we want to be sure that new drugs and procedures are safe we have to continue using test animals. Using strict protocols helps to avoid unnecessary animal suffering. Researchers should provide the public with information in order to avoid misunderstanding.

November 13, 2011
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Hello Anke and welcome to Writefix!

Thanks for your excellent 336-word essay on this emotive topic.

Your introduction is short but very strong - almost unassailable, in fact!  In three short and simple sentences, you cover both sides of the issue, state the situation, give your opinion, and follow the instruction (in IELTS) to 'use details from your own experience.'

In Paragraph 2 you discuss the continuing search for new remedies and the development of new procedures.  You state that both of these result in a need for testing, and that testing results in many dangerous drugs and procedures being withdrawn that would otherwise cause problems.

In Paragraph 3 you give some more details of your experience, and explain why animals are used and under what circumstances or controls.

In Paragraph 4 you suggest that many people are against animal testing because they don't have enough information about it. You also explain why computer simulations are not enough. (This sentence about simulations might have been better placed in Paragraph 2 -  what do you think?)

Finally, in your conclusion you give your opinion,  state what is necessary to ensure that animals do not suffer too much, and suggest a course of action ('Researchers should provide the public with information...')

Well done!

One small point:

Don't join sentences with 'nevertheless' or 'however' -  the result is a comma splice or a run-on sentence.

Medical knowledge is improving at a fast rate, nevertheless there are still many diseases that cannot be cured...

Just use a full stop, or a semicolon:

  • Medical knowledge is improving at a fast rate. Nevertheless, there are still many diseases that cannot be cured...
  • Medical knowledge is improving at a fast rate; nevertheless, there are still many diseases that cannot be cured....

I hope we can see some more essays from you!

November 14, 2011
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Hi Enda

Thank you for your helpful comment. I am studying for IELTS Academic and will post more essays in the following weeks. It is good to practice!

Regards, Anke

 

 

writefix said:

Hello Anke and welcome to Writefix!

Thanks for your excellent 336-word essay on this emotive topic.

Your introduction is short but very strong - almost unassailable, in fact!  In three short and simple sentences, you cover both sides of the issue, state the situation, give your opinion, and follow the instruction (in IELTS) to 'use details from your own experience.'

In Paragraph 2 you discuss the continuing search for new remedies and the development of new procedures.  You state that both of these result in a need for testing, and that testing results in many dangerous drugs and procedures being withdrawn that would otherwise cause problems.

In Paragraph 3 you give some more details of your experience, and explain why animals are used and under what circumstances or controls.

In Paragraph 4 you suggest that many people are against animal testing because they don't have enough information about it. You also explain why computer simulations are not enough. (This sentence about simulations might have been better placed in Paragraph 2 -  what do you think?)

Finally, in your conclusion you give your opinion,  state what is necessary to ensure that animals do not suffer too much, and suggest a course of action ('Researchers should provide the public with information...')

Well done!

One small point:

Don't join sentences with 'nevertheless' or 'however' -  the result is a comma splice or a run-on sentence.

Medical knowledge is improving at a fast rate, nevertheless there are still many diseases that cannot be cured...

Just use a full stop, or a semicolon:

  • Medical knowledge is improving at a fast rate. Nevertheless, there are still many diseases that cannot be cured...
  • Medical knowledge is improving at a fast rate; nevertheless, there are still many diseases that cannot be cured....

I hope we can see some more essays from you!

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