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(5 votes) 9:46 pm
December 29, 2011
OfflineStudying history plays an important role in our age definitely. As from my point of view, studying history is not only vital as one of main subjects of an school's curriculum, but in practice of the society to know change and how that community come to be. Therefore, this essay will discuss about the importance of studying history as well as some consequences if children are not taught history.
Firstly, let us talk about the significant role of studying history in our society. Naturally, people want to know as much clearly as possible regarding their society's establishment and development process. Take an example, it is important for people to know how their ancestor did to build up their country and maintain it as beautiful and peaceful as it is. What is more? Knowing well about history help people to learn about some kinds of mistakes what did happened. By doing this, it is critical to avoid repeating them wisely.
So, it is obvious to see some serious consequences will occur if children are not discussed about history. First of all, it will bring up a generation who will be lack of the pride and love for their community. Consequently, it will possibly lead to a new generation of irresponsibility, ignorance and egocentric. Additionally, people will easily lose their ethnic background if they have an insufficient history knowledge.
In conclusion, it is important for people to acknowledge their history foundation, regardless of their age. To do this, children should be taught history not only y their school duty, but their parent's cooperation.
12:57 am
December 29, 2011
Offline2:04 pm
Hi Brisbane and welcome to Writefix!
Here are a couple of points
Studying history definitely plays an important role in school definitely. As From/In my point of view, studying history is not only vital as one of the main subjects of an a school's curriculum, but in practice of for a society to know change and how that community has come to be. Thus essay will discuss about the importance of studying history as well as some consequences if children are not taught ithistory.
In Paragraph Two:
What is more? Knowing well about history help people to learn about some kinds of mistakes what did happened. By doing this, it is critical to avoid repeating them wisely.
...could be rewritten as:
What is more, knowing history well helps people to avoid repeating the mistakes of the past.
Word Forms:
Watch for lists which should be parallel:
Consequently, it will possibly lead to a new generation of irresponsibility, ignorance and egocentric.
This could be changed to
Consequently, it could lead to a new generation of irresponsibility, ignorance and egocentricity/egocentricism.
Conclusion
You introduce some new information in the conclusion when you mention the teaching of history by parents. This could have been an interesting section in the body of your essay. Make sure you don't add new information in the conclusion!
Overall, your sentences are well structured and are the right length. Just make sure you develop your ideas in the body and remember, three is the magic number of examples/ideas in each paragraph.
Good luck with your writing in the exam and let us know how you get on!
9:23 am
October 25, 2011
OfflineIt is some times said that history never repeats it self,yet there is much in it which is relevant to our modern life.Studying other historical periods gives insight in to different ways of life.For example,student can investigate the way which people lived in ancient times such as ancient Greec or Roma empire.As a result ,they will be able to compare these societies with our own.Therefore,they will become more aware of the kind of society we live in.Furthermore, they will come appreciate the counteribution that these society made to the way we live to day.
Studying about history can bring many of benefits to our modern lifestyle.For example,learning about conflicts in the past can teach us how to avoid them in the future.In other words,history is an experience which you do not need to taste it and it helps people to compare between goods and bad.On the other hands, some people believe that ,they should experience every thing by their own.
To put the whole story in a nut shell, history is one of the most important parts of every society,because it is a fact which happened in the past and people can easily rely on the subjects.
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