Hi Madina and welcome to Writefix!

Thanks for posting your new essays on careers and on governments and art. I hope some other users of the forum comment on them soon. From a quick glance, they look fine to me. 

Remember, all the people here are busy people planning to do IELTS or other exams, as well as studying, taking care of children, minding their family, learning English, and working full-time at jobs as photographers, doctors, pharmacists, engineers, lawyers, nurses, dental technicians, bank tellers, teachers, or students -  and all planning either to change their careers or change their country.  

People like you. 

Sometimes they don't have time to spend to give good feedback on every new essay. 

Why don't you give some comments on some other people's essays? It's great practice for your own editing, and it also encourages other people to comment on yours.

I will try to have a look this evening or tomorrow.